Watch the use of would. The helping verb refers to usual action. Once you make it clear that you refer to something that’s frequent, you don’t need to use it again.
Category Archives: Editing
Avoid starting sentences with “it was” or “there was.”
by Tamela Hancock Murray As Steve Laube pointed out the other day in his post The Stages of Editorial Grief receiving a tough edit can make a writer
One easy solution for getting sentences off to a strong start is to make them more active by eliminating what is called an expletive, or a dummy subject, such as “There is” or “There are.” It is not necessary to eradicate all expletives from your writing, but minimize them by identifying the real subject of the sentence and reconstructing the sentence with that focus — with the added benefit of a more concise statement.
This type of feedback makes my day!
“Adam edited a 365-page manuscript for me, and did exactly what I (and the manuscript) needed. He was painstakingly meticulous; thorough and consistent; and “translated” an AP writing style into book style. But he did more than just edit; he posed questions, suggested improvements, and offered comments. And he explained why certain changes were made or suggested. I gained considerable insight into my own words and work simply by reading and reviewing what he did. And the manuscript is now on its way to publication. I couldn’t have asked for a better, more professional editor.”
–Glynn Young, author of the soon-to-be-published Dancing Priest